Muriel Dickens is a strange hippie. In fact, she is a Russian hippie who lives in the large town of Getersbalb, Montana. She doesn’t have a car so she rides around town on a lawn mower and works at Willie Wonka's Candy Factory. Muriel is married to a odd man by the name if Rory Miracle. Rory is the founder of the successful company Miracle Whip. They have 36.26 children, 30 goldfish, 6 guinea pigs, a crocodile, five tweety birds, and Bugs Bunny. They live in a sky scraper called The Miracle House, "where miracles happen".
Although they live in the Miracle household they have a pretty boring life. The kids sky dive to school everyday with Fabio. Their eldest daughter is the crazy Muriel Dickens the II, their eldest son is the amazingly funny Will Ferrel, and their youngest son is the mini, evil master mind that wants to take over the world, but nobody listens to him...... Stewie (from Family Guy).
One day Muriel rode up the 15 min. elevator and walked into the living room where she saw her son Will watching Looney Tunes on the 455 in. plasma screen. “Oh my goodness! What on earth happened to you mummy? You are covered in chocolate!” Will said in his cute little British accent that Muriel loved. “Is it Bubba again?” (Bubba is the biggest baddest Umpa-Lumpa who has bullied Muriel for years.) Muriel looked away. “Mum you need to tell Mr. Wonka about this. How long has this been going on?” She silently, without a word, walked to the elevator and went to her room.
The next morning Muriel wasn’t feeling too well. Will gave her a strange silver and blue can with a picture of two bulls charging at each other in front of a full moon. She took a couple of cautious sips then violently started drinking the odd liquid; spilling half of it all over her peace sign p.j’s. “MORE! MORE!!!” Muriel demanded. She ran to the refrigerator and grabbed the jumbo Red Bull that said on the back “WARNING!!! Serving per size: 1 sip." Muriel totally forgot about her lawn mower keys soooooo….. she ran to the nearest garage and hot wired (which she had no idea she could do) the nearest car which happened to be her husbands favorite Bugati Veron. She raced to work while plowing through fire hydrants and newspaper stands. Muriel parked inside the lobby of the factory and raged up to the chocolate waterfall, where she knew she would find Bubba. Bubba was shocked at the maddening look in Muriel's eyes. Muriel charged him, picked him up over her head (even though he weighs a metric ton), and threw him down the chocolate waterfall into the raging chocolate river! Just like he had done to her the day before.
To Be Continued……
Logan, this is a fun expansion of your original Muriel Dickens piece. You've added some funny details and it is obvious you had fun with this reality you've created. I like the irony and the exaggerations. My favorite line is, "she took a few cautious sips." It's not surprising that my favorite line is very realistic. It has nothing to do with the crazy world they Muriel lives in. It has more to do with the very real way a person tries something she's never tried before: cautious sips. Your piece is more a "stream of consciousness" piece than a tight, edited piece, right? Did you write anything else this week? Did you try for some other topic? Did you highlight your favorite lines? Do you know WHY you like this piece? I'd be interested to know. Thanks, Logan. Carolyn
ReplyDeleteLogan, WRITE THE CONTINUED PART!!!!!!!!!!! I think my favorite sentence was, "Muriel charged him, picked him up over her head (even though he weighs a metric ton), and threw him down the chocolate water fall into the raging chocolate river!". Great post!!! (again) ;)
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I re-read your piece, Logan, and your talent for writing ACTION is pretty undeniable! Great energy in this piece. It does NOT lie flat on the screen! Carolyn
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